Sunday, August 29, 2010
My Proper Narative
A cold gust of wind blew strongly by as Andy walks higher and higher. The freezing White Mountain falls with hailing snow giving the illusion of hypothermia. Andy is an average, old tall man weak but fit who had the glorious dream to climb enormous snow Mountains. He enjoys the amazing scenery, the fresh breeze and the smell of thick less air.
As squawking eagles and rumbling planes go by all he wants to hear is the breezy cold gust of victory as he is determined to reach the top. But “oh no!” as he shouted out to himself “Avalanche!” he quickly finds a safe spot to wait out the avalanche as the thundering sound of his heartbeat smashes into his ribs. Bursts of fear clouds his thoughts as he whispers to himself “will I survive this?”... A few minutes go past as the raging avalanche finally stops and wonders to himself what triggered that avalanche? But he doesn’t worry about that, as all he is focused on is getting to the top.
Each steps Andy goes higher is making him hard to breathe as if you were like holding your breath till you reach the top of a endless mountain. Andy worries as if something’s going to happen like that destructive avalanche comes blasting back but tries to thing good thoughts and thinks of his family as they will wish him happy birthday when he finishes his unbearable climb and return to his wonderful home. Andy clicks as he had a hunch that what he was climbing on was an ACTIVE VOLCANO!, With his old wise brain that’s what he thought caused the deadly avalanche as he was correct and another viscous avalanche appears when he was nearly there at the top. POW! Out of nowhere the avalanche bursts on top of him covering him with thin white snow piling on top of him. The rumble stops as a moment of silence decreases for a few seconds, but again out of nowhere, POOF!, Andy pops out of the thin white snow leaving him with no more interruptions and continues on to finishing his continuous climb.
As he reaches the top, blue skies and white clouds was all he could see as he was breathless. For what it was worth an old average man completed his life for filling dream to climb enormous snow mountains. Brinnggggg!!! As the alarm annoys Andy for waking him up as he was dreaming about his dream to climb mountains and hopefully does one day he wakes up says “wait a minute”. Andy stops and think with his old dusty brain and remembers “I’ve already done that” as the memorable memory comes back to him and ticks of the To do things in the futer on his check list and marks right next to “to for fill my dream” *tick and happily goes back to sleep with a grin on his face.
My Draft Narrative
A cold gust of wind blew by as Andy walked up and up. The freezing White Mountain falling with hailing snow was giving Andy hypothermia. Andy is an average old tall man weak but fit who had the desire and dream to climb enormous snow Mountains. He enjoys the beautiful scenery, the fresh breeze and the smell of thickness air.
As squawking eagles and rumbling planes go by all he wants to hear is the breezy cold gust of victory as he will reach the top. But oh no as he shouted out to himself “Avalanche!” he quickly finds a safe spot to wait out the avalanche as the thundering sound of his heartbeat smashing into his ribs bursts with fear and whispers to himself “will I survive this?”... A few minutes go past as the raging avalanche finally stops and wonders to himself what triggered that avalanche? But he doesn’t worry about that as all he is focused on is getting to the top.
Each steps he goes higher is making him hard to breathe like holding your breath till you reach the top. Andy worries as if something’s going to happen like that avalanche for instances but tries to thing good thoughts and thinks of his family as they will wish him happy birthday when he finishes his climb. Andy clicks as he had a hunch that what he was climbing on was an ACTIVE VOLCANO! With his old brain that’s what he thought caused the avalanche as he was correct and another viscous avalanche appears when he was nearly there at the top. POW! Out of nowhere the avalanche bursts on top of him covering him with snow piling on top of him.... the rumble stops as a moment of silence decreases for a few seconds but again out of nowhere poof, Andy pops out of the snow leaving him with no more interruptions and finishing his climb.
As he reaches the top blue sky’s white clouds was all he could see as he was breathless. For what is was worth an old average man completed his life for filling dream and desire to climb enormous snow mountains. Brinnggggg!!! As the alarm annoys Andy for waking him up as he was dreaming about his dream and desire to climb mountains and hopefully does one day. He wakes up says “wait a minute” Andy stops and think with his old dusty brain he remembers “I’ve already done that” as the memorable memory comes back to him and ticks of the To do things in the futer on his check list and marks right next to “to for fill my destiny” *tick and happily goes back to sleep with a grin on his face.
Wednesday, August 25, 2010
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A cold gust of wind blew by as Andy walked up and up. The freezing White Mountain falling with hailing snow was giving Andy hypothermia. Andy is an average old tall man weak but fit who had the desire and dream to climb enormous snow Mountains. He enjoys the beautiful scenery, the fresh breeze and the smell of thickness air.
As squawking eagles and rumbling planes go by all he wants to hear is the breezy cold gust of victory as he will reach the top. But oh no as he shouted out to himself “Avalanche!” he quickly finds a safe spot to wait out the avalanche as the thundering sound of his heartbeat smashing into his ribs. As he bursts with fear he whispers to himself “will I survive this?”... A few minutes go past as the raging avalanche finally stops and wonders to himself what triggered that avalanche? But he doesn’t worry about that as all he is focused on is getting to the top. As he reaches the top blue sky’s white clouds was all he could see as he was breathless.
For what is was worth an old average man completed his life for filling dream and desire to climb enormous snow mountains. Brinnggggg!!! As the alarm annoys Andy for waking him up as he was dreaming about his dream and desire to climb mountains and hopefully does one day. He wakes up says “wait a minute” Andy stops and think with his old dusty brain he remembers “I’ve already done that” as the memorable memory comes back to him and ticks of the To do things in the futer on his check list and marks right next to “for fill my destiny” *tick and happily goes back to sleep with a grin on his face.
Tuesday, August 24, 2010
PK's Mum
Hi this is Pranay's mum. I've seen his blog and you are doing well.Just a suggestion PK, how about putting every ones name across rather than horizontal as this will give you more space to work on other things you want.
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